Hows my poem?

feel like u r here

feel like u r there

shadow like u follow me

is this called love?

if yes then tell me

ur one sight quentch thirst

away from u make me burst

ur one smile make me gloom

love scent spread in room



like creeper without earth

like body without life

feel like when ur far

thought to tell u

but afraid to loose u

is this called love?

then tell me



want to go far away on moon

only u and me

grow the flowers of love there

u pick andput in my hair

Hows my poem?
Sorry, I honestly don't like.
Reply:THIS POEM IS VERY GREAT.

actually WHEN I THINK OF IT WHEN I READ IT,IT REALLY TOUCH MY HEART.

YOU NOE MY BF JUSS BROKE UP WITH ME N I WISH I STILL HAVE HIM RIGHT BY MY SIDE.

THANK FOR THIS WONDERFUL POEM I THIS YOU BE A POET ONE DAY.

YOUR POEM ARE JUSS BRILLIANT.

I ADMIRE IT SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH IAM NOT KIDDING.
Reply:I like it
Reply:its ok, but it sounds more like a song than a poem
Reply:Wow, its amazing. I feel the depth of the meaning, the fear and confusion. It's just absolutely amazing.
Reply:Why not spice it up with a little metaphor and some revision?
Reply:i see your feelings and everything. this poem has great potential but you need to reword it. its obvious that you tried very hard to make it ryhme and it shouldnt be it should just flow.
Reply:U r in love....Duh